Bug 1182407

Document URL: 
https://access.redhat.com/documentation/ja-JP/Red_Hat_Enterprise_Linux/6/html/Global_File_System_2/s1-customer-portal.html

Section Number and Name: 
2.8 Performance Issues: Check the Red Hat Customer Portal

Describe the issue: 

I would like to change the format for the fixed expression about reference.

EN: For information on best practices for deploying and upgrading Red Hat Enterprise Linux clusters using the High Availability Add-On and Red Hat Global File System 2 (GFS2) refer to the article "Red Hat Enterprise Linux Cluster, High Availability, and GFS Deployment Best Practices" on Red Hat Customer Portal at https://access.redhat.com/site/articles/40051. 

JA: High Availability アドオンおよび Red Hat Global File System 2 (GFS2) を使用する Red Hat Enterprise Linux クラスターのデプロイおよびアップグレードのベストプラクティスについての情報は、Red Hat カスタマーポータルに掲載の "Red Hat Enterprise Linux Cluster, High Availability, and GFS Deployment Best Practices" というタイトルの記事を参照してください . https://access.redhat.com/kb/docs/DOC-40821。 

(1) redundant: Red Hat カスタマーポータルに掲載の "Red Hat Enterprise Linux Cluster, High Availability, and GFS Deployment Best Practices" というタイトルの記事を参照してください

-> Because 「"Red Hat Enterprise Linux Cluster, High Availability, and GFS Deployment Best Practices" を参照してください。」would be enough information for the latter part of the sentence, addintg "Red Hat カスタマーポータルに掲載の" and "というタイトルの記事を" would be redundant (especially the latter).

(2) ungrammatical

Addting the link after the completed sentence is ungrammatical for Japanese speaker.

This sentence is not bad for understanding, but I think that the simpler sentence would give better impression to customers, so please consider it as fixed expression.