Red Hat Bugzilla – Bug 982656
A couple of suggestions for 9.17. Installation Complete
Last modified: 2014-08-05 07:56:09 EDT
Just a couple of suggestions for section 9.17. Installation Complete
"Now that you have configured the remaining settings, your Fedora installation is now complete!" --> "Now that you have configured the remaining settings, your Fedora installation is complete."
"9.17.1. Initial Setup in GNOME" --> GNOME Initial Setup
"haven't" --> "have not"
"The Initial Setup application is only available for GNOME."
This might need some rewording since we now have two initial setup apps in Fedora (http://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Features/NewFirstboot, https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Features/InitialExperience) that do almost the same thing, but target different DEs.
"create an user account" --> "create a user account"
"After you are finished configuring" --> "After you have finished configuring"
"On the first login, the Gnome Help application will automatically open"
The application is called Yelp, not Gnome Help. However, you probably just want to mention that "GNOME Help will automatically open...".
"Figure 9.40. Language selection in Gnome Initial Setup" --> "Language selection in GNOME Initial Setup"
I reworked the entire section, corrected the mistakes described and split it into two subsections - one for GNOME's initial experience and one for the new firstboot on other desktop environments.
Changes are in commit 1852bb4127b1c7391a836c20f9045f19c6bfb579.